Alright I’ve designed a reformatted, simplified proposal as per my comments.
If EM does not accept his proposal to be amended, I’m always willing to withdraw it.
New draft :
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Bill on the Rights of Citizens, Verified Residents and Nations of The East Pacific
WHEREAS the Concordat of the East Pacific grants rights and protections to the Citizens of TEP;
WHEREAS the Concordat does not recognize any such protections nor rights to the residents nor indivual Nations of the East Pacific;
WHEREAS the Nations of the East Pacific wish to secure the necessary rights and protections for all Nations and Residents of the East Pacific under the Concordat;
NOW THEREFORE, the Magisterium enacts as follows:
…1. “Article F: Rights of Citizens” of the Concordat shall be renamed “Article F : Rights of Citizens, Verified Residents and Nations of The East Pacific”.
…2. Sections 2,7 and 9 shall be removed, and the other current Sections of Article F shall be renumbered accordingly. Said Sections 2 and 7, as before said renumbering, shall be added as new Sections 13 and 14 respectively. Section 9, as before said renumbering, shall be added as a new Section 15.
…3. After Section 6, as renumbered by article 2 of this Bill, the following Sections will be added:
“Section 7) A Resident is a nation that resides in the East Pacific.
Section 8) A Verified Resident is a Resident that has endorsed the Delegate and the Viziers and has joined the regional forums of The East Pacific.
Section 9) Each Verified Resident shall have the right to free speech and the government shall take no action to limit this except when determined to be a public nuisance by the Viceroy in a summary judgement without trial.
Section 10) Verified Residents can appeal actions taken against them by the regional authorities to the Viceroy, who shall rule by summary judgement without trial.
Section 11) Verified Residents shall have no right to a trial by the Conclave, nor any right to be represented by legal counsel.
Section 12) Verified Residents may not serve in any office of the East Pacific government.”
Enactment
This bill shall come into effect upon its ratification by the Citizens of the East Pacific voting in a referendum administered by the Conclave, as set out in Article G of the Concordat.
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EM’s original draft:
[spoiler]Article G: Residents
Section 1) A Resident is a nation that resides in The East Pacific.
Section 2) A unprotected Resident is a nation that has not endorsed the Delegate and Viziers.
Section 3) A protected Resident is a nation that has endorsed the Delegate and Viziers but has not joined the regional forum.
Section 4) A verified Resident is a protected Resident that has joined the regional forums or official Discord server(s) of The East Pacific but has not ratified the Concordat.
Section 5) The Delegate shall be charged with maintaining a record of all verified Residents.
Article H: Protections, Restrictions and Rights of Residents
Section 1) Unprotected Residents have no protections or rights.
Section 2) Each protected and verified Resident shall have the right to free speech and the government shall take no action to limit this except when a Resident is determined to be acting deliberately to cause a public nuisance by the Delegate and Regional Officers.
Section 3) Protected Residents can appeal actions taken against them to the Delegate or Viziers.
Section 4) Verified Residents can appeal actions taken against them to the Viceroy.
Section 5) Protected and verified Residents do not have the right of legal counsel or a trial before the Conclave.
Section 6) No banned resident can become a citizen.
Section 7) Each Resident nation may enter and leave the region freely, unless that nation has been banned.
Section 8) No Resident may serve in any office of The East Pacific government.
Article I: Amendments
Section 1) This Concordat shall take effect following a simple majority ratification vote of nations of The East Pacific publicly on the offsite forums, to be overseen by the Elders.
Section 2) The East Pacific Elders shall oversee the first elections for Delegate and Magisterium following the successful completion of the ratification process. This voting shall take place publicly on the offsite forums. The Elders shall cease to function thereafter.
Section 1) The Magisterium shall have the authority to propose an amendment to this Concordat by a 2/3 vote; such an amendment must receive the support of 3/4 of those Citizens voting in a referendum administered by the Conclave.
Section 2) Any changes made to the Concordat shall result in a new citizenship topic started with the amended Concordat in it. The former citizenship thread will be linked in that first post. [2013 Am 1, §8]
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Actual changes to the Concordat:
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Article F: Rights of Citizens, Verified Residents and Nations of The East Pacific
Section 1) Each citizen shall have the right to free speech and the government shall take no action to limit this except when a citizen is determined to be acting deliberately to cause a public nuisance by the Conclave.
Section 2) Each nation shall have the power to make such alliances as it sees fit, so long as these alliances do not act against the East Pacific, nor violate this Concordat.
Section 32) Each citizen shall have the right to a swift and impartial trial by the Conclave if action is taken against them by the regional authorities.
Section 43) No citizen shall be tried twice for the same offense.
Section 54) No citizen shall be forced to incriminate itself.
Section 65) Each citizen shall have the right to legal counsel in a trial before the Conclave.
Section 7) Each nation may enter and leave the region freely, unless that nation is convicted of a crime by the Conclave. Citizens shall upon leaving the region surrender any governmental roles outlined in this Concordat and unless granted honorable citizenship may not hold such roles until they return.
Section 86) Each citizen shall be free to serve in any office in the East Pacific but no nation shall be granted a title of nobility by the government of the East Pacific, nor will such titles granted outside the East Pacific be favored above that of Citizen of the East Pacific. [2014 Am 5]
Section 9) All rights not in this Concordat described or reserved to the government shall remain in the hands of the individual nations.
Section 7) A Resident is a nation that resides in the East Pacific.
Section 8) A Verified Resident is a Resident that has endorsed the Delegate and the Viziers and has joined the regional forums of The East Pacific.
Section 9) Each Verified Resident shall have the right to free speech and the government shall take no action to limit this except when determined to be a public nuisance by the Viceroy in a summary judgement without trial.
Section 10) Verified Residents can appeal actions taken against them by the regional authorities to the Viceroy, who shall rule by summary judgement without trial.
Section 11) Verified Residents shall have no right to a trial by the Conclave, nor any right to be represented by legal counsel.
Section 12) Verified Residents may not serve in any office of the East Pacific government.
<font color=“#6AA84F”>Section 13) Each nation shall have the power to make such alliances as it sees fit, so long as these alliances do not act against the East Pacific, nor violate this Concordat.
Section 14) Each nation may enter and leave the region freely, unless that nation is convicted of a crime by the Conclave. Citizens shall upon leaving the region surrender any governmental roles outlined in this Concordat and unless granted honorable citizenship may not hold such roles until they return.
Section 15) All rights not in this Concordat described or reserved to the government shall remain in the hands of the individual nations.
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A word of explanation regarding some changes I’ve made in this.
I removed the categories of unprotected residents and protected residents, as I don’t believe they are necessary. An unprotected resident was basically a resident, and a protected resident was a category not really used thereafter. I also removed the reference to Discord as only these regional forums are an official platform to register with the government, as far as I’m concerned. I also believe the onus of proof, should it be necessary for procedures, is on the Resident regarding its status as Verified resident. As such, the Delegate does not need to keep a list (which is a time-consuming thing to do, and not very useful probably).
I’ve proposed the Viceroy as a check on residents rights, by a summary judgement without trial. This means the Viceroy rules on these issues brought before him, without any need for a procedure, and either confirms the decision by the government, or nullifies it.